- Nominator: Diegg24 (talk) 12:24, 6 August 2024 (UTC)Reply[reply]
- NOMINATOR COMMENT: I have taken advice from the last time I nominated this article, and now I believe it is better. Diegg24 talk 12:23, 6 August 2024 (UTC)Reply[reply]
- COMMENT: Oo, good progress! I have some minor points: the etymology section only deals with Pacifico: it might be worth adding the etymology of Soragal and the Holy Mincar Empire, and why/how they got their names, what it means etc. The wall of text under the § Empire of Pacifico section could be spread into two or three paragraphs, separated by how related they are. § Administrative divisions could be expanded slightly with some notable (but brief!) information on each region, especially the colonies since they do not have their own articles.. also, explain what a province, colony and town is, like what the criteria for designation is and why they are all separate classifications. I also still would consider the addition of a § Culture section.. everything else looks great though! Very pleased with your work on it. Template:ZedSig (talk ❧ contribs) at 22:37, 6 August 2024 (UTC)Reply[reply]
- @Diegg24: 1. If possible, throw in a culture section; 2. every new paragraph in § History starts with "on [date]", so to avoid repetition I would interchange this with putting the date at the end of some sentences (where it fits, like shorter ones); 3. I would expand the lead section slightly, with content like i.e. Malaysia (but not as lengthy ig); 4. is it possible to add any physical image(s) of the micronation if comfortable? Template:ZedSig (talk ❧ contribs) at 19:50, 1 November 2024 (UTC)Reply[reply]
- @Noone: All the suggestions suggested in your comment have been implemented. Diegg24 talk 09:22, 2 November 2024 (UTC)Reply[reply]
- OPPOSE: Not quite ready yet. The date ranges are painfully obviously formatted inconsistently and incorrectly—date ranges should always use an en dash (–), not a hyphen (-). As well, there is a big, red error at the bottom about an invalid
<ref/>, which is so plain to see that it boggles the mind why this article would be nominated before its rectification. In the intro, after "listen", there is an extra closing parenthesis. "Republic of Soragal" is single-quoted instead of double-quoted, and it's with two right-quotes at that. This is not an article that has been copyedited, and an article that has not been copyedited is not an article that is ready for GA. If you can carefully copyedit this article, I may reconsider my vote. /swέna/ 💬 00:17, 8 August 2024 (UTC)Reply[reply]
- COMMENT: @Swena: Done! I have implemented everything mentioned in your comment.
- COMMENT: @Diegg24: Thanks, but you did not resolve the myriad other copyediting issues plaguing the article. The purpose of my comment was not to point out four things—it was to demonstrate widespread issues with the article. I just now dedicated some time to copyediting various things, including fixing blatant punctuation issues in the intro, the etymology section, the footnotes, and more. I also improved the IPA transcription and standardized the citations. But the rest of the article suffers from these same sorts of issues: improper (seemingly almost random) capitalization, improper punctuation, et cetera. And there are more issues still than just those of copyediting: the style of the article is basic, very "This happened. That happened. That happened. This happened.", particularly in the history section, which is a simple (but long) listing of facts with little literary merit. This does not reach the quality of writing that I feel should be used to showcase what an article on MicroWiki should be. It's history—you should be able to retell it with some narrative; it shouldn't just be a trite list of events. A shorter trite listing of events won't block GA (see Ikonia), but if you're going to keep it like that, then you're going to have to give some thought to what events are actually worth mentioning on the main page vs in a separate, in-depth history article; and in any case, you're going to want to make extensive use of linking words.
- I have helped with a good deal of the copyediting, but I cannot do everything that needs doing—you have to do the rest yourself. That said, I do not want this to be all doom and gloom—you are well on your way, and this article is very capable of becoming a GA with a little more elbow-grease.
/swέna/ 💬 21:21, 8 August 2024 (UTC)Reply[reply]
- COMMENT: @Swena: Done? I have been improving it today, but I am not sure if it's enough. Diegg24 talk 15:06, 10 August 2024 (UTC)Reply[reply]
- COMMENT: Significant improvement! Though, there were still a few copyediting (punctuation, grammar) issues and there is definitely still room for improvement in style. I went and helped with the first few sections of the article, just now. I know this isn't your first language, and that can make the art of publishing extra-hard. Kudos for sticking with it.
/swέna/ 💬 12:20, 14 August 2024 (UTC)Reply[reply]
- COMMENT: @Swena: Now I'm done! Diegg24 talk 9:24, 18 August 2024 (UTC)
- COMMENT: @Diegg24: What about the incomplete administrative divisions table?
/swέna/ 💬 05:18, 28 August 2024 (UTC)Reply[reply]
- OPPOSE: I don't doubt this page will get to GA soon, but I will also join the others and suggest filling the blank cells of the administrative divisions as well as expanding on the section in general on describing the colonies, towns and military zones in more details as they don't have any links. Other than that, I don't really see any too large issues with the article. AtomCZ (talk) 17:53, 28 August 2024 (UTC)Reply[reply]
- This article was retained from the previous GA cycle and any discussion has been maintained for continued work to be done. 𝄞 Strubber ♫ Contributions ♩ 03:13, 1 September 2024 (UTC)Reply[reply]
- COMMENT: Ok, I've finished filling in the blank cells on the administrative divisions table, just about to start expanding the administrative divisions section. Diegg24 talk 13:14, 2 September 2024 (UTC)Reply[reply]
- COMMENT: @Swena: @AtomCZ: Now I'm actually done! Diegg24 talk 13:14, 2 September 2024 (UTC)Reply[reply]
- COMMENT @Swena: @AtomCZ: I have implemented all the changes suggested but the original commenters have not responded. Diegg24 talk 14:55, 15 October 2024 (UTC)Reply[reply]
- OPPOSE: I still have a major concern in the passages that claim military actions and a war that resulted in Pacifico getting more land. I feel like this needs to be much better elaborated and explained of what exactly happened here as I don't think a fair representation is currently made. 𝄞 Strubber ♫ Contributions ♩ 20:38, 31 October 2024 (UTC)Reply[reply]
- @Strubber: I believe that I have corrected everything that you cited. Diegg24 talk 10:11, 1 November 2024 (UTC)Reply[reply]
- Nominator: Template:ZedSig (talk ❧ contribs) at 17:12, 6 August 2024 (UTC)Reply[reply]
- OPPOSE: I'm really sorry—I do not want to be "that guy" here—but this article as it stands is not ready for GA. There were, before I fixed them, obvious grammar and copyediting mistakes in the intro (!!), and so much of the article is redundant that you could actually replace about 50% of it with the following and lose nothing: "small, urban, got all of its food from the UK, had no arable land, Plitvice did recreational organic gardening, weeds were annoying". If the many slightly-reworded repeat sentences are removed and any outstanding grammar/punctuation issues are resolved, I'd consider changing to an "APPROVE"; but I am not sure the article would be of sufficient length to warrant GA without its repeated repetition; and to be quite honest, its current length is already a bit borderline.
/swέna/ 💬 22:23, 7 August 2024 (UTC)Reply[reply]
- OPPOSE: I will have to agree with Swena on this one, the article seems just too short. Maybe consider merging it into a larger Economy in New Eiffel article? AtomCZ (talk) 17:55, 28 August 2024 (UTC)Reply[reply]
- @Swena and AtomCZ: how about now? Template:ZedSig (talk ❧ contribs) at 21:30, 29 August 2024 (UTC)Reply[reply]
- This article was retained from the previous GA cycle and any discussion has been maintained for continued work to be done. 𝄞 Strubber ♫ Contributions ♩ 03:13, 1 September 2024 (UTC)Reply[reply]
- I implemented all of the suggestions but the original commenters have not yet responded. Template:ZedSig (talk ❧ contribs) at 16:59, 8 October 2024 (UTC)Reply[reply]
- 1984. Template:ZedSig (talk ❧ contribs) at 16:57, 15 October 2024 (UTC)Reply[reply]
- Nominator: AtomCZ (talk) 17:19, 28 August 2024 (UTC)Reply[reply]
- NOMINATOR COMMENT: Only took me four and a half years to sit down and spend four and a half days writing an actual article for it. Once @Noone: uploads his agar.io medal as he promised this article should be finally done. AtomCZ (talk) 17:19, 28 August 2024 (UTC)Reply[reply]
- SUPPORT, very good and expansive. Only needed a few grammar and formatting edits which I have made. Definitely GA material. Template:ZedSig (talk ❧ contribs) at 17:17, 15 October 2024 (UTC)Reply[reply]
- Nominator: Template:ZedSig (talk ❧ contribs) at 15:42, 1 September 2024 (UTC)Reply[reply]
- Nominator: ZuppaDiCarlo (talk) 12:41, 6 September 2024 (UTC)Reply[reply]
- SUPPORT: the entry on heraldry is very nice and detailed with sources.. it deserves to be a quality entry for the MicroWiki showcases!! Kalyroon22 l'Arciduca Padano 16:33, 15 October 2024 (UTC)Reply[reply]
COMMENT: looks good, but I have a few suggestions before I can vote support: the headers should all be in sentence case, i.e. "Semi-Modern Landopian Heraldry: Rise of the Sodacan Style" should be "Semi-modern Landopian heraldry: rise of the Sodacan style" etc. In a short few words, explain who Sodacan is for readers who are unaware. Lastly, I would also elaborate on "semi-complex shapes"; the first part of the sentence is good but this seems vague – what are semi-complex shapes, and do the other heraldry styles not have them or are they more complex? Other than that it is a very good article, so I would be happy to support once these changes are made. Template:ZedSig (talk ❧ contribs) at 17:44, 15 October 2024 (UTC)Reply[reply]
- NOMINATOR COMMENT: We corrected everything you cited. Check the corrections. KingCarlo (talk) 16:09, 16 October 2024 (UTC)Reply[reply]
- Thanks; nice work! I am now happy to SUPPORT this wonderful article for GA status. Template:ZedSig (talk ❧ contribs) at 20:28, 30 October 2024 (UTC)Reply[reply]
- SUPPORT: A detailed and informative article, well-supported by references and containing minimal grammatical errors. Diegg24 talk 10:55, 1 November 2024 (UTC)Reply[reply]
- Nominator: Razvan Juncu (talk) 13:13, 23 September 2024 (UTC)Reply[reply]
- COMMENT: There are some things that need to be fixed: Ranzania, for example, is an observer state (and not a member) of GUM. The section on the etimology of the name "Ranzania" is missing. The section on national symbols is above the history of the country (which, at the very least, should be the other way around). The "Air Force" section should be a chapter of the "Armed Forces" section. Some images should be made much smaller. The foreign relations tables should be less colorful. Otherwise, if all of this is fixed, I will vote for the nomination. KingCarlo (talk) 10:54, 17 October 2024 (UTC)Reply[reply]
- Nominator: ZuppaDiCarlo (talk) 00:23, 15 October 2024 (UTC)Reply[reply]
- SUPPORT: The page on the Landopian flag is very extraordinary: full of images on historical flags and details with sources... it deserves to be on the front page of the MicroWiki showcase!! Kalyroon22 l'Arciduca Padano 16:35, 15 October 2024 (UTC)Reply[reply]
- Nominator: Diegg24 talk 06:31, 15 October 2024 (UTC)Reply[reply]
COMMENT: two things do not convince me: the absence of the reason for the choice of the city's name (in the etymology section there is an interesting history of the words "New", "Parkia" and "Cheston", but not the reason and origin of this choice), and the absence of at least one image, even if putted as reference, of the city. Otherwise, if all of this is fixed, I will vote for the nomination. KingCarlo (talk) 20:38, 1 November 2024 (UTC)Reply[reply]
- COMMENT: @ZuppaDiCarlo: These two problems have been solved. Diegg24 talk 08:41, 2 November 2024 (UTC)Reply[reply]
- SUPPORT Thank you. I like this article. KingCarlo (talk) 09:03, 2 November 2024 (UTC)Reply[reply]
- Nominator: Template:ZedSig (talk ❧ contribs) at 20:19, 30 October 2024 (UTC)Reply[reply]
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