Talk:Kingdom of Hawthorne
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 | Kingdom of Hawthorne was a good article, but it was removed from the list as it no longer met the good article criteria at the time. There are suggestions below for improving the article. If you can improve it, please do; it may then be renominated. Review: June 19, 2021. (Reviewed version). |
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What does it need?
What does this page need?-- Isaiah (Chat) 02:24, 4 December 2020 (UTC)
Fixes required for article
As noted in the template comments: Spelling errors in the article. Several poorly expanded sections in the history section. As a side note, do not make your entire article a list of 7 template, as this makes it difficult for other editors to make contributions to the page.
This article should have the several templates removed, and have the actual text restored: the system in place makes it very difficult for other editors. Additionally, please review the spelling and grammar in the article, and consider expanding those noted sections and.. in my opinion moving them to a more appropriate section or article. Sertor (Chat) 16:07, 27 April 2021 (UTC)
- I fixed all the grammar I could find that was wrong for the article and I think you are referring to the First Parliament section on the article even though I think it's very fitting as that's a big piece of history, of course that is the only one I would put like I wouldn't add the second election on there. I will remove the 7 templates and replace it back.
- Also all the sections in the History section are over a 950 characters which is pretty long, but if it makes you feel any better I merged the Speaker of Parliament election section and the first parliament election section together to make it overall longer.